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Would you let me know if you think this is close to professional (able to be published) writing? 1. yes 2, no 3. don’t care and any comments would be greatly appreciated_ Alma:I ask a girl for her pbone number and she gave it too me but when I ask her on a date she says [...]
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Toshia:
I didn't know what she was talking about.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
I was very nervous and confused.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
She told me that she can't believe my mother's words.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
She left my room and after a few minutes, she came back and she started yelling at me.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
My girlfriend said that she will do this for her.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
Everything was going well, till mother who's suffering from MS and she can't walk called me from her room and she asked me to bring her some water.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
We slept next to each other and we kissed, but nothing more.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
We don't want to have sex with each other till marriage.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
I'm 24 years old and my girlfriend is 18. We met each other two months ago and last night she came to visit me in my house for the first time.
(31 December 2018)

Inga:
Ok so I've known the girl for about 2 and a half months, made it official 8 days ago, here's a little description about how she acts when I'm with her.
(31 December 2018)